On Being Grateful You Used Pencil
a nonet
I forgave your mistaking today
for forever, for penciling
hearts next to all the dates on
the calendar of our
lives together, I
erased them while
you slept, I
loved you,
did.
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Well done on placing in the challenge ✅.
This is outstanding. Congratulations
Penciling hearts on a calendar and then erasing them is soo powerful. You managed to say so much in so few words. So glad this placed! Congrats
I love this! Congratulations! It is art, period.
This descriptive imagery says so much more than even the words. Wow! I can easily see why it was shortlisted. You deserve some big "WOOT-WOOTS!" Job well done and mega-congrats for placing in the challenge!
Well done on your challenge placement 🙏🏻🌟🤍👌🫶🏻
I love your nonet - congratulations on your win!
Ooh, I love how you phrased the last two lines. Congratulations, Ava!
Congrats!
Your writing style is so original. I love it! Congratulations!
this is so beautifully and painfully crafted. well deserved win! congrats!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congrats, Ava! Well deserved placement in the challenge!
Oof it’s heavy Ava. Love the past tense in the final word- says it all really. The idea of erasing is a such a fascinating one for something like a relationship that’s nearly over.
Really striking- thoughtfully and beautifully composed!
Uh huh! Erased 👏
Ha, it is a nice poem where teaches us to think about who helped you in the past!!!!!!!!!
Forgiveness is crucial part of our life ,but forgiving repeated mistakes is not encouraged
What a great image in the pencil! So simple yet meaningful. Impermanence. Erasable. Makes me think of all the things I need to erase..... 💚
Stunning imagery with a big emotional impact! Great nonet, Ava!
Beautiful, strong and sad at the same time. You have a way of writing poetry that is quietly powerful
If only we had erasers for our hearts . . . Well done, Ava! I love your Nonet!
Beautiful and heartwrenching!
Great take on the challenge and wonderful that you are back
This is wonderful. Love the image of erasing the hearts. Well done.